PROBLEM AND SOLUTION ESSAY: OBESITY

Discuss the solutions to the problem of obesity

1.       THE FIRST VERSION

·         Number of paragraphs: 4

Introduction

Obesity is of concern to the individual and the government

Health issues (cardiovascular, diabetes and the like)

The treatment of the above: expensive

Thesis statement: should cover both entities

Development (2 paragraphs)

First developmental paragraph: personal solutions

(Diet and exercise)

Second developmental paragraph: Solutions the government/ municipality may implement

(Banning the sale of fast food, sweet snacks and sugary drinks at school canteens, banning the advertising of the same, providing opportunities for sport at schools, in parks and playing fields)

Conclusion

Individuals and the municipality need to pull together to tackle the problem/ it concerns everyone

2.       THE SECOND VERSION

·         Number of paragraphs: 6

Introduction:

Same as above

Development: 4 paragraphs

First developmental paragraph: first personal solution, diet

Second developmental paragraph: second personal solution, exercise

Third developmental paragraph:  solutions implemented by the municipality, in school measures, sales in the canteen, sports facilities in school

Fourth developmental paragraph: public solutions, regulating of advertising, targeted education (the media), public sports facilities (parks)

Conclusion

Same as above